IFor this post, I decided to revise a simple email that I sent out earlier this semester regarding my topic for the expert discussion lead. The original email is short, sweet, and to the point, but revising for ars dictaminis required the inclusion of other information that was implicit in the original email.I know that I wasn't able to match the curus rhythmic style, but I gave it my best shot.
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Hi, Dr. Rice,
I'm thinking about focusing on East
Asian rhetorics (Korean, Japanese, etc.). I'd like to get my feet wet in those
areas especially after I started reading that dissertation you sent earlier.
Would that be acceptable?
David
David
Ars Dicitaminis Revision
To Dr. Rich Rice,
By
divine grace resplendent in Ciceronian Charm, I David, inferior to his devoted
learning, expresses the servitude of a sincere heart. Many thanks for reminding me of my obligation
to expertly lead class at some time this semester. I must also thank you for sending the
dissertation on Buddhist Indian Rhetoric.
This dissertation greatly influenced my own interests inside and outside
of this course. I have set aside time to
ponder the complexities of this task and humbly ask that I be allowed to focus
my discussion on East Asian rhetoric (specifically the Korean rhetorical
tradition). This area is of much
interest to me as a potential research opportunity; therefore, taking time to
begin exploring this topic now would be of great benefit to me. Also, the intercultural focus of the course
can be emphasized with this discussion.
I understand that we have previously covered Chinese rhetoric; however, we
did not include information regarding other East Asian rhetorical traditions. Expanding on additional rhetorical traditions
can reinforce our class’ awareness of different rhetorical traditions that lie
outside of the predominant Western rhetorical tradition.
Once
again, I must give thanks to you for providing an opportunity to lead discussion
for one class period. I, your ever-dedicated,
always obedient student, hope that you find this topic proposal appropriate for
your expectations and gleefully, humbly await your response.
Always
in honorable service,
David
David--Most excellent post, thou most logical, astute, and thoughtful student of the highest possible order. Good thinking through of salutation, securing of goodwill, narration, petitio, and conclusion. Each of these rhetorical elements should be added to your rhetorical terms list. We are reading now about copia and lists which situate best practices for each of these sections of an effective letter. Still, each of these sections, I believe, are helpful in composing letters today, don't you think? Shall we talk more about the dissertation on Buddhist rhetoric? Is there a section in particular the whole class should read?
ReplyDeleteAmazing how we can now say so much with less text. Could you imagine if we communicated in this way today? The economy offered by less formal and "flowery" language is interesting to see? Can we be as persuasive and deferential if we say fewer words? It depends on the context/situation, of course.
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